This is the comments my teacher sent back that need to be done
the body paragraphs are comparatively quite short, Because the intro is so long for this length of paper, you need to make sure each body paragraph in the final draft will be as long as the intro or longer. otherwise consider revising the intro for the length. the sources you have are not scholarly. they are good, and they are credible, but are not scholarly, you can use them but you still need to find three scholarly sources for the purpose of the paper, you list seceral things in your intro and you need to go back to it and make sure you know exactly what to adress and in what order. Right now i do not feel like the body paragraphs are follonwing any kind of order based on the intro.